can someone check my grammar pls?
January 202010
According to Balliger, politics are not merely political structure but it’s all about power relation in everyday activities. From my personal musical experience I also encounter some of this situation where dominating power of foreign music influence the society. I was watching a primetime TV show in which the singers singing pop music are collaborated by the kulintang ensemble, but instead of playing the instruments on its traditional manner the performer were instructed to change the rhythmic pattern in order to cope to the pop music. The function of the kulintang ensamble is purely to accompany the group of pop singers. This situation show how the music industry today politically manipulates and washout the value of traditional music of our country. Aside from this I also notice that some of the radio station in the country is purchasing and continuously airing Korean pop even though we don’t understand the language some people are trying to sing and do the dances step of these songs.
According to Balliger, politics are not merely political a* structure but *they are* all about power relation in everyday activities. From my personal musical experience I also encounter some of this situations** where dominating power of foreign music influence *todays society*. I was watching a prime time television* show in which the singers singing pop music are collaborated by the Kulintang ensemble, but instead of playing the instruments on its traditional manner the performer were instructed to change the rhythmic pattern in order to cope to the pop music. The function of the Kulintang ensemble??? is purely to accompany the group of pop singers. This situation shows* how the music industry today politically manipulates and washes out* the value of traditional music of our country. Aside from this I also noticed* that some of the radio stations* in the country are** purchasing and continuously airing Korean Pop even though we don’t understand the language. Some people are trying to sing and do the dances step of these songs.
I put stars next to the things I fixed. I’m guessing you’re not very good at grammar? Understandable. There might be more that needs fixing those are just what I saw right away.
January 21st, 2010 at 1:57 am
that is so messed up i could not even fix that if i had all day, sorry.
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January 21st, 2010 at 2:40 am
According to Balliger, politics are not merely political a* structure but *they are* all about power relation in everyday activities. From my personal musical experience I also encounter some of this situations** where dominating power of foreign music influence *todays society*. I was watching a prime time television* show in which the singers singing pop music are collaborated by the Kulintang ensemble, but instead of playing the instruments on its traditional manner the performer were instructed to change the rhythmic pattern in order to cope to the pop music. The function of the Kulintang ensemble??? is purely to accompany the group of pop singers. This situation shows* how the music industry today politically manipulates and washes out* the value of traditional music of our country. Aside from this I also noticed* that some of the radio stations* in the country are** purchasing and continuously airing Korean Pop even though we don’t understand the language. Some people are trying to sing and do the dances step of these songs.
I put stars next to the things I fixed. I’m guessing you’re not very good at grammar? Understandable. There might be more that needs fixing those are just what I saw right away.
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